IELTS Writing 6.5 vs 7: the same essay, before and after
A real Band 6.5 Task 2 essay, scored against all four criteria, then rewritten to Band 7 — so you can see exactly what changes.
The fastest way to understand the gap between Band 6.5 and Band 7 in IELTS Writing is to see the same essay before and after. Below is a genuine Band 6.5 response to a Task 2 question, scored the way an examiner scores — against all four criteria — followed by the exact diagnosis and the same essay rewritten to Band 7. Nothing about the writer's English changes. What changes is how the essay responds to the task.
The question
Some people think the best way to reduce traffic congestion is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.
Before — the Band 6.5 essay
In today's modern world, traffic congestion is a very big problem in many cities around the globe. Some people are of the opinion that increasing the price of fuel is the best solution, while others disagree with this view. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument.
On the one hand, raising fuel prices can be effective. When fuel becomes more expensive, people will think twice before using their cars. They may decide to use public transport instead, or share a car with their colleagues. Also, the government can collect more money from taxes, which can be used to improve roads and other facilities. Therefore, this policy has some benefits.
On the other hand, there are also some disadvantages. Increasing the price of fuel can affect poor people the most, because they need their cars to go to work and they cannot afford expensive fuel. In addition, the price of goods may increase because transportation becomes more costly. There are also other solutions such as building more public transport, improving cycling lanes, and encouraging people to work from home.
In conclusion, increasing fuel prices has both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the government should consider all the solutions together to solve the problem of traffic congestion in a better way.
The analyser breakdown — why it is 6.5, not 7
Scored against the four equally weighted criteria, the essay above sits at 6.5 overall. The grammar and vocabulary are already at Band 7 — the score is held down by the two criteria that have nothing to do with English ability.
| Criterion | Band | What the examiner sees |
|---|---|---|
| Task Response | 6 | The prompt asks 'to what extent do you agree' — it needs a clear, consistent position. This essay discusses both sides and only states an opinion in the last line. Ideas are listed, not developed. |
| Coherence & Cohesion | 6 | Paragraphs are organised, but ideas are stacked ('Also…', 'In addition…') rather than extended. No single idea is followed through to a clear consequence. |
| Lexical Resource | 7 | Adequate range and mostly accurate ('congestion', 'public transport', 'facilities'), with only minor slips. Already at 7. |
| Grammatical Range & Accuracy | 7 | A mix of simple and complex sentences with good control and few errors. Already at 7. |
Overall = the average of the four, rounded: (6 + 6 + 7 + 7) ÷ 4 = 6.5. To reach Band 7 overall, the writer does not need better English — they need to lift Task Response and Coherence by half a band each.
The three changes that move it to Band 7
- 1Take a clear position and hold it. 'To what extent do you agree' requires a stated degree of agreement in the introduction, maintained to the conclusion — not a both-sides survey that commits only at the end.
- 2Develop two ideas instead of listing five. Pick the two strongest points and extend each one: claim → why it happens → a specific consequence or example. Depth is what Coherence rewards.
- 3Cut the memorised opener and filler. 'In today's modern world…' and 'This essay will discuss both sides' add nothing. Replace them with a direct response to the question.
After — the same essay at Band 7
Raising the price of fuel is often proposed as the simplest way to ease traffic congestion. While higher prices would discourage some drivers, I largely disagree that this should be the main solution, because it penalises those with no alternative while leaving the underlying problem untouched.
It is true that more expensive fuel changes behaviour. When running a car becomes costly, commuters who have a realistic alternative — a reliable bus route, a train line, or a colleague to share the journey with — will switch, and congestion eases at the margin. This is why fuel taxes can reduce car use in dense cities such as London, where public transport is genuinely available. The effect, however, depends entirely on that alternative existing.
For most commuters, it does not, and this is the core weakness of the policy. A nurse travelling to a hospital in an area with no early-morning transport cannot simply stop driving; a higher fuel price becomes a tax on getting to work rather than a reason to change. Worse, because almost all goods are moved by road, dearer fuel raises the cost of food and everyday items, so the policy quietly punishes the same low-income households twice. A measure that hits hardest the people least able to respond is poorly targeted.
In conclusion, while increasing fuel prices would modestly reduce car use where alternatives already exist, I disagree that it is the best solution. Investing in those alternatives first — frequent public transport and safe cycling routes — addresses the cause of congestion rather than merely charging people for being stuck in it.
What actually changed
| Band 6.5 version | Band 7 version |
|---|---|
| Discussed both sides, opinion only at the end | Clear position ('I largely disagree') stated upfront and held |
| Five ideas listed briefly | Two ideas, each developed with a consequence and example |
| 'In today's modern world…' opener | Opens with a direct answer to the question |
| General claims ('affects poor people') | Specific scenario (a nurse with no early transport; goods costing more) |
The word count is similar. The vocabulary and grammar are the same level. The difference is entirely in Task Response and Coherence — which is exactly where most 6.5 essays leak the half-band.
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Frequently asked
What is the difference between a Band 6.5 and a Band 7 IELTS essay?
Usually not the English. In most 6.5 essays the vocabulary and grammar are already at Band 7, and the score is held down by Task Response (no clear, consistent position; ideas listed rather than developed) and Coherence (points stacked rather than extended). Lifting those two criteria by half a band each takes the overall from 6.5 to 7, as shown in the before-and-after example in this guide.
How is the overall IELTS Writing band calculated?
Your overall Writing band is the average of the four criteria — Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy — each weighted equally, then rounded to the nearest half band. For example, scores of 6, 6, 7 and 7 average to 6.5. This is why a single weak criterion can cap an otherwise strong essay.
Do I need a clear opinion in a 'to what extent do you agree' essay?
Yes. That question type requires you to state how far you agree or disagree and to maintain that position consistently from introduction to conclusion. A balanced essay that only reveals an opinion in the final sentence is marked down on Task Response, because it does not fully answer the question that was asked.
Is it better to develop fewer ideas in IELTS Writing?
Generally yes. A Band 7 Task 2 essay typically develops two ideas fully — each with an explanation and a specific example or consequence — rather than listing four or five briefly. Examiners reward extension and depth under Coherence and Task Response, so two well-developed points score higher than five undeveloped ones.
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